Today’s Words of Wisdom returns to an evergreen topic: villains. We love to hate them. Our fiction needs them. They help drive the plot. Understanding the importance of villains can be the key to writing more engaging and gripping mysteries and thrillers.
Clare Langley-Hawthorne, James Scott Bell and Debbie Burke give advice and tips on creating better villains in your fiction. Afterwards, please give us your take.
It can often be all too easy to fall for the ‘psychotic’ serial killer or other sort of evil cliche without trying to provide for the reader a solid grasp of what lies behind this. Villains rarely consider themselves villains. Sometimes they feel justified (in their own perverted way) or compelled by something to do what they do. Unlike in real life, in fiction, we can often provide the reader with a rationale for someone’s behaviour.
So how do you create a believable villain? How do you ensure that, when it comes to the battle between good and evil, neither side slides into caricature? I’ve been thinking about this a lot in my current WIP and I have some to a few conclusions (or observations, at least) as I go through this process:
1. Characters don’t think they are dumb so don’t make them do ‘dumb’ things just because they are (cue manic Dr. Evil laughter) the bad guy.
2. Don’t fall into the trap of making evil generic. For every character there needs to be a specific reason, cause or motivation for his or her behaviour. The more specific and believable this is, the more believable a character will be.
3. Give you villain a clear objective. I’m not a big fan of the psycho who just seems to do stuff because he is, well, ‘psycho’ – this always seems to the to dilute the power of having an antagonist.
4. Think as much about the back story for your villain as you do for the protagonist of the story – this will ensure the character behaves consistently and with clear purpose. It also helps you avoid falling into a cliche if you have a fully realized back story.
Clare Langley-Hawthorne—July 23, 2012
Dean Koontz wrote, “The best villains are those that evoke pity and sometimes even genuine sympathy as well as terror. Think of the pathetic aspect of the Frankenstein monster. Think of the poor werewolf, hating what he becomes in the light of the full moon, but incapable of resisting the lycanthropic tides in his own cells.”
All this to say that the best villains in fiction, theatre, and film are never one-dimensional. They are complex, often charming, and able to manipulate. The biggest mistake you can make with a villain is to make him pure evil or all crazy.
So what goes into crafting a memorable villain?
- Give him an argument
There is only one character in all storytelling who wakes up each day asking himself what fresh evil he can commit. This guy:
But other than Dr. Evil, every villain feels justified in what he is doing. When you make that clear to the reader in a way that approaches actual empathy, you will create cross-currents of emotion that deepen the fictive dream like virtually nothing else.
One of the techniques I teach in my workshops is borrowed from my courtroom days. I ask people to imagine their villain has been put on trial and is representing himself. Now comes the time for the closing argument. He has one opportunity to make his case for the jury. He has to justify his whole life. He has to appeal to the jurors’ hearts and minds or he’s doomed.
Write that speech. Do it as a free-form document, in the villain’s voice, with all the emotion you can muster. Emphasize what’s called “exculpatory evidence.” That is evidence that, if believed, would tend to exonerate a defendant. As the saying goes, give the devil his due.
Note: This does not mean you are giving approval to what the villain has done. No way. What you are getting at is his motivation. This is how to know what’s going on inside your villain’s head throughout the entire novel.
Want to read a real-world example? See the cross-examination of Hermann Goering from the Nuremberg Trials. Here’s a clip:
“I think you did not quite understand me correctly here, for I did not put it that way at all. I stated that it had struck me that Hitler had very definite views of the impotency of protest; secondly, that he was of the opinion that Germany must be freed from the dictate of Versailles. It was not only Adolf Hitler; every German, every patriotic German had the same feelings. And I, being an ardent patriot, bitterly felt the shame of the dictate of Versailles, and I allied myself with the man about whom I felt perceived most clearly the consequences of this dictate, and that probably he was the man who would find the ways and means to set it aside. All the other talk in the Party about Versailles was, pardon the expression, mere twaddle … From the beginning it was the aim of Adolf Hitler and his movement to free Germany from the oppressive fetters of Versailles, that is, not from the whole Treaty of Versailles, but from those terms which were strangling Germany’s future.”
How chilling to hear a Nazi thug making a reasoned argument to justify the horrors foisted upon the world by Hitler. So much scarier than a cardboard bad guy.
So what’s your villain’s justification? Let’s hear it. Marshal the evidence. Know deeply and intimately what drives him.
- Choices, not just backstory
It’s common and perhaps a little trite these days to give the villain a horrific backstory and leave it at that.
Or, contrarily, to leave out any backstory at all.
In truth, everyone alive or fictional has a backstory, and you need to know your villain’s. But don’t just make him a victim of abuse. Make him a victim of his own choices.
Back when virtue and character were actually taught to children in school, there was a lesson from the McGuffey Reader that went like this: “The boy who will peep into a drawer will be tempted to take something out of it; and he who will steal a penny in his youth will steal a pound in his manhood.”
The message, of course, is that we are responsible for our choices and actions, and they have consequences.
So what was the first choice your villain made that began forging his long chain of depravity? Write that scene. Give us the emotion of it. Even if you don’t use the scene in your book, knowing it will give your villain scope.
James Scott Bell—October 26, 2014
I wrote mysteries like I read mysteries, from a state of ignorance, constantly trying to figure out what was going on.
I had a general idea of the bad guy’s motive, but never paid much that attention to the schemes and machinations happening offstage. All action took place onstage because the first or close third POV required the sights, sounds, smells, and emotions be filtered through the protagonist only. My focus stayed stuck on the hero.
The bad guy hid in the shadows behind the curtain until the big reveal at the end. Unfortunately he’d been hiding from the writer too!
Finally, thanks to the wise folks at TKZ, I recognized the big fat blind spot in my books.
Here’s the epiphany:
In crime fiction, the antagonist drives the plot. Unless a crime has been committed, or is about to be committed, there’s nothing for the protagonist to do. The antagonist acts, the protagonist re-acts.
I’d been following the wrong character around all these years!
My realization probably seems like a big DUH to many crime authors. But I’m sharing it in hopes of helping others like myself who overlooked the obvious.
It’s fun to think like a villain! When I started writing from the bad guy’s POV, a whole new world opened up—a world without conscience, constraints, or inhibitions.
Jordan’s great post from last May says, “The best villains are the heroes of their own stories.”
Actor Tom Hiddleston says, “Every villain is a hero in his own mind.” Most actors would prefer to sink their fangs into the role of a great villain than play the good guy.
The baddies in my earlier books had been flat and dull because I’d never gotten inside their heads. Finally, the missing element became clear and…my book won a publishing contract!
Why is the villain willing to steal, cheat, and kill? What rationalizations justify the harm done to others?
A sociopath comes up with perfectly logical justifications and excuses for abhorrent actions.
Irresistible influences like greed, power, and lust can seduce an ordinary person over to the dark side.
Misguided righteousness can lead to horrendous consequences.
A law-abiding citizen may be forced into a corner where he commits acts he would never do under normal circumstances.
If an author roots around in the antagonist’s brain for a while, background, reasons, and rationalizations for antisocial behavior bubble up. Armed with such knowledge, it becomes impossible to write a two-dimensional character. Jim Bell offers a great technique—try to imagine the villain delivering the closing argument to the jury that will determine his fate.
Do you show the villain’s POV in the story or not? That choice is contingent on subgenre.
In a whodunit mystery, the identity of the villain is typically a surprise at the end. Therefore, that POV is generally not shown to the reader, although some authors include passages from the villain’s POV without revealing the identity.
Suspense and thriller novels often are written from multiple POVs, including the villain’s. When the reader knows early on who the bad guy is, the question is no longer whodunit, but rather will s/he get away with it?
The author can choose to show the antagonist’s POV or keep it hidden. But either way, you need to be aware of it because that’s what’s driving the story forward.
Even if you never show the villain’s POV, try writing scenes inside his/her head.You don’t need to include them in the book, but the act of writing them gives you a firmer grasp on that character’s deep desires and how those desires screw up other people’s lives. Once you really understand what the antagonist is striving for, that provides a solid framework from which the story hangs.
If you’re in a corner and your hero doesn’t know what to do next, check in with the villain. While the hero is slogging through steps A, B, and C to solve the crime, the bad guy is offstage setting up roadblocks D, E, and F to keep from being caught.
Debbie Burke—September 28, 2017
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There you have it, advice on writing villains. Today the authors of our three excerpted posts pose the questions to help jumpstart our discussion:
- So how do you approach the process of creating villains? Are there any ‘evil doers’ in novels that strike you as the ‘dumb and dumber’ of their kind? What about the most chilling, compelling and believable villains in fiction?
- What’s your approach to villain writing?
- What is your villain doing right now? Do you prefer to show the antagonist’s POV or keep it hidden?
My studies of the human mind have revealed that, as Carl Jung said, “In each of us there is an ʘther, whom we do not know…” This ʘther, the protective region of the brain, is fast, sentient, autonomous, and without conscience. As Jung said, “…He speaks to us in dreams,” but he also can inject his thoughts directly into our working memory, where they appear to be our own. If he thinks, “A drink would be really great right now,” we might very well take one, depending on his size, our mood, and our habits, and then blame ourself totally. If he thinks, “World domination would be nifty!” we might take it up. If we have suffered a traumatic brain injury (TBI), he could have free rein over our behavior. There, but for the grace of God, go you and I. I base my villains on this theory.
Hitler, the villain in my thriller, was beaten unconscious at least once by his sadist father, according to Patrick Hitler. Adolf’s brother Edmund died of measles encephalitis. Adolf probably had the same disease, which can result in lack of a moral conscience, and which often causes early onset Parkinson’s as can be seen in the last films of Hitler. The likelihood of Hitler having had either a TBI or a non-TBI, or both, is high. As the son of an alcoholic, he likely had that large protective brain region that lacked a conscience. All the same, I don’t grant him a Get-out-of-Spandau-free Card.
Fascinating, JG. This ‘Other’ region might be where Steven Pressfield’s Resistance springs from–they sound like the same thing viewed from different angles.
Environment shapes us all, including (perhaps especially) those who are villainous, as your example about Hitler illustrates.
Could be!
There are psychopaths and sociopaths, but there are also those who have Fetal Alcohol Syndrome. I knew nothing about this disorder until I worked as the business manager for our school district and was introduced to two students who had it. Neither had the facial features normally associated with the syndrome. Both were likeable and friendly. Both did things that were hard to believe. The superintendent’s office was next to mine so students who got into trouble and were sent to see him waited in the area outside our doors. I saw over and over where the superintendent or one of the principals would “have a talk” with them, explaining why what they did was wrong. Both students would nod, both would promise to never do it again, and both ended up there over and over.
One of them stole her younger sister’s college savings by forging a note from her saying she’d given her older sister permission to withdraw the funds. She took the note to her grandmother, who worked at the bank, and who believed her, because, man, she could be sincere, and gave her the money. She spent it on a weekend of shopping and partying, and when confronted said, “You weren’t using it.” This same girl was put in a group home for FAS adults. Her parents didn’t realize until later that she’d stolen a book of checks (remember those?) and was forging her mother’s name to buy frivolous things, or to give money to a guy. This guy took her from the home, and no one knew where she was. A year later, she crawled in the window of her parents’ house one night. The next morning, she showed them her baby and promised she’d learned her lesson and would do better. She disappeared again three days later, leaving the baby. Years later, she’s still creating havoc and committing crimes because one never outgrows FAS.
I did a lot of research on the syndrome. At that time, no one knew exactly what caused it. Could it be from one drink at the wrong time, or several drinks across the pregnancy? Most associate it with a mother who’s an alcoholic, yet the girl above had an educated, responsible mother who drank only the occasional glass of wine and stopped that when she found out she was pregnant. Her guilt made her overlook a lot of bad behavior. Because the father worked at the school with me, I heard a lot of what they were dealing with. I’ll never forget the bleakness on his face when he said, “We’re going to be dealing with this for the rest of her life.”
I began wondering how many people are walking around out there with no ability to associate an action with a consequence. The professionals at the group home told her parents that they could tell her a hundred times that if she did X, Y would happen, but she’d do it again and again because her brain couldn’t process it. Punishment didn’t work for either of these students. It’s chilling to think about.
So very tragic, Becky. To be robbed of a conscience by Fetal Alcohol
Syndrome, and be driven by impulse and perceived need as a result.
Each of us is responsible for our actions, but to have someone engaged in sociopathic behavior because of FAS and literally being incapable of understanding, for instance, that stealing and forgery are wrong and criminal, is heartrending.
It sounds like whatever part of her brain is left has no conscience.
Right now my villain is doing everything she can to mold her children in what she THINKS is good. She’s rational. She’s just misinformed and trusted the wrong people.
Villains are fun to write!
You have a terrific villain there, Priscilla. Enjoy 🙂
Great collection of posts, Dale. Extremely helpful.
In my WIP I have a villain that shows up as an unsuspected character in a few scenes, and later as an unknown dark shadow. He/she will be uncovered before the end of the story.
I must mention that Debbie Burke is working on a book – The Villain’s Journey. a needed addition to the craft-of-writing books. I look forward to reading it when it is published.
Have a great day!
Thanks for the shout-out, Steve!
Thanks, Steve! It sounds like the villain in your WIP embodies the shapeshifting aspect often seen with villains which helps fool others and allows them to be stealthy as they commit their crimes.
Hope you have a fine Saturday.
Dale, thanks for including my excerpt in today’s Words of Wisdom! Villains/antagonists are the driver of stories. Their actions are the rock dropped in the lake of everyday life that causes waves to hit other characters and society at large.
Right now, my two villains are throwing boulders into the lake 😉
Thank you, Debbie, for writing that post. I like the metaphor of villains being rock-throwers into the lake of everyday life. Very evocative way of depicting their forceful disruption.
I’m so looking forward to your book on villains.
Excellent post-Dale, Jim, Debbie, and Clare. Villains are far more interesting to scrutinize than a hero.
Coincidentally, Garry Rodgers published a blog post this morning about the real motivation behind the Manson murders. Now there’s a real-life villain who has some backstory I’d never heard. You can read Garry’s post here: https://dyingwords.net/the-real-reason-behind-the-manson-cult-murders/
Happy Saturday everyone!
Thanks, Deb. And thanks for the link to Garry’s latest post at his website! Hope you have a wonderful day.
You have to take care in creating your villains in any genre, but to me there’s an extra layer of complication writing the villain in mystery–because you’re limited in what you can reveal. I’m still learning the ropes.
Villains in a mystery as very deceptive, and shapeshifters in how they seem to others, including the sleuth-hero. Preparing for the reveal at the end is a challenge, but of course that’s where clues come in, often subtle in the form of little out-of-character-behaviors. Though those can also be used as red herrings.
The sleuth and the reader, consciously or unconsciously, are trying to build a profile of the killer, mapping the shadow as it were.
Wise words and useful ones, Dale. The quote by Goering is especially scary.
It truly is, Elaine.