The Dos and Don’ts
Of A Great First Chapter

By PJ Parrish

Okay, this is going to be old stuff for some of you. But after reading a couple of our First Page Critique submissions lately, I’m thinking we could all use a handy-dandy review of what needs to go into an opening chapter.

Consider this food for thought, no matter where you are in your writing process. If you’re staring at your computer screen and there are only two words on it — CHAPTER ONE — this is for you.  If you’re about 155 pages in and you’re stuck, maybe going back and reviewing your beginning will help you find your way out of the swamp. And if you’ve just typed those wonderful two words — THE END — then this review is really for you. Because THE END is never really the end. It is the beginning. (rewrite time!)

Do: Create a Good Hook

  • The first chapter is where reader makes a decision to enter your world.
  • Needn’t be fast or fancy. But it must make you care about a character and what is happening to him.
  • Large hooks can disappoint readers if the rest doesn’t measure up. If you begin writing at the most dramatic or tense moment in your story, you have nowhere to go but downhill.
  • If hook is strange or misleading, you might have trouble living up to its odd expectations.

“A cheesy hook drives me nuts. They say ‘Open with a hook!’ to grab the reader. That’s true, but there’s a fine line between an intriguing hook and one that’s just silly. An example of a silly hook would be opening with a line of overtly sexual dialogue.” — agent Daniel Lazar

Do: Come Up With a Juicy Opening Line

  • Your opening line gives you an intellectual line of credit from the reader. The reader unconsciously commits: “That line was so damn good, I’m in for the next 50 pages.”
  • A good opening line is lean and mean and assertive. No junk language or words.
  • A good opening line is a promise, or a question, or an unproven idea. It says something interesting. It is a stone in our shoe that we cannot shake.
  • BUT: if it feels contrived or overly cute, you will lose the reader. Especially if what follows does not measure up. It is a teaser, not an end to itself.

The cat sat on the mat is not the opening of a plot. The cat sat on the dog’s mat is.”       – John LeCarre

Do: Get Into Your Story As Late As Possible

Begin your story just before the interesting stuff is about to happen. You want to create tension as early as possible and escalate from there. Don’t give the reader too much time to think about whether they want to go along on your ride.

Where do you CHOOSE to enter your story time-wise? Think of yourself as a paratroop commander. You’re pushing your jumpers (readers) out of the plane. Where do you want them to land for maximum suspense? Too early you bore your reader (throat clearing) Too late you confuse the reader (coma syndrome).

Do: Introduce Your Protagonist

Never wait too late in the story to give us the hero. And readers have to care about him or her right from the start. And be careful not to give the early spotlight to a minor character because whoever is at the helm in chapter one is who the reader will automatically want to follow. If it is someone minor, reader will feel betrayed and annoyed when you shift the spotlight.

Now, I hear you:  But my first chapter shows the serial killer at work! Or: But I need this world-building prologue first! Okay, okay. So maybe you can wait until chapter 2 to have your heroine walk on stage, but don’t play around too long. The reader won’t wait forever to bond with your main man or woman.

“Sometimes a writer will create an interesting character and describe him in a compelling way, but then he’ll turn out to be some unimportant bit player.”
— Ellen Pepus, Signature Literary Agency

Do: Open With A Disturbance!

Our own James Bell preaches this all the time. Something has to be amiss. Depending on what kind of book you are writing, or your genre, the disturbance can be earthshattering (a thriller about a killer comet heading our way!) or cozy-mild (the owner of  a florist shop finds a corpse in her orchid house!). But you have to tilt the protag’s world off its axis.

  • Conflict drives good fiction. It disrupts the status quo. Your first chapter is
    not a straight line. It’s a jagged driveway up a dark mountain and the
    shadows are full of danger.
  • Don’t fall into the “happy people in Happy Land” trap. Don’t think that if you
    first show the lead character in her normal life, being happy with her family
    or dog, we’ll be all riled up when something bad happens to this nice person.
  • Don’t fall into the “I’m the Greatest Literary Stylist of Our Time” trap. This is
    where a writer tries to display brilliance via pure prose before, somewhere
    down the line, something like a plot kicks in.

“Too much ‘telling’ vs. ‘showing’ in the first chapter is a definite warning sign for me. The first chapter should present a compelling scene, not a road map for the rest of the book. The goal is to make the reader curious about your characters, fill their heads with questions that must be answered, not fill them in on exactly where, when, who and how.” — Emily Sylvan Kim, Prospect Agency

Do: Establish Your Time And Place

This is small but important. You have to tell the reader where we are in the world (or universe) and at least a hint of the time (year, era). If you don’t, the reader flails around, gets coma syndrome and then usually gets aggravated. Also, if you aren’t writing in current day, you need to tell reader. Because details about the culture, police procedure and forensics will be in question.

A word about time and place taglines on your chapter headings: Try to avoid them. They smell of amateurism and say that the writer does not know how to gracefully slip this info into the story – or that they are too lazy to do it. But sometimes, a complex plot needs tags, like if you are jumping around in time and geography.

Goa India, 1889.

Paris, France, 1945

Do: Get Your Characters Talking As Soon As Possible

Dialogue is the lifeblood of your story and you need it early. Too much exposition or description is like driving a car with the emergency brake on.  Remember: Dialogue is a from of ACTION.  I’ll let the experts tell you:

“My biggest pet peeve with an opening chapter is when an author features too much exposition – when they go beyond what is necessary for simply ‘setting the scene.’ I want to feel as if I’m in the hands of a master storyteller, and starting a story with long, flowery, overly-descriptive sentences makes the writer seem amateurish. — Peter Miller, PMA Literary and Film Management

“I don’t really like ‘first day of school’ beginnings, ‘from the beginning of time,’ or ‘once upon a time.’ Specifically, I dislike a Chapter One in which nothing happens.”
— Jessica Regel, Foundry Literary + Media

“What I hate are characters that are moving around doing little things, but essentially nothing. Washing dishes & thinking, staring out the window & thinking, tying shoes, thinking.”- — Daniel Lazar, Writers House

Now the next two Dos are up for discussion. Because while both are very important, you might not be able to get this done in your Chapter One. But you must lay the groundwork for both of these elements in the first couple chapters.

Do: Define The Stakes And Your Hero’s Journey 

What is at play in the story? What are the costs? What can be gained,
what can be lost? Love? Money? One’s soul? Will someone die?
Can someone be saved?

What is the journey you’ve set up for your hero or heroine? What is their PERSONAL ARC. How will they change and/or grow?

The first chapter doesn’t demand that you spell out the stakes of the entire book in neon but we do need a hint.


Do: Establish Your Tone And Voice

From the get-go, your reader should be able to tell what kind of book he is reading – hardboiled, romantic, humorous, neo-noir. Everything in your book should support your tone, but the first chapter is vital to inducing an emotional effect in your reader. Edgar Allan Poe’s wrote of something he called the UNITY OF EFFECT. Which means that every element of a story should help create a single emotional impact.

Make your own voice loud and clear. This is where you are introducing your story but also yourself as a writer. Your language must be crisp, you must be in complete control of your craft, you must be original! No self indulgent description, no bloated passages, no slack in the rope. Don’t try to be “writerly.” Good writing does not call attention to itself. The reader must feel he is being led by a calm, confident storyteller.

“I hate reading purple prose – describing something so beautifully that has nothing to do with the actual story.”  — Cherry Weiner, Cherry Weiner Literary

“Someone squinting into the sunlight with a hangover in a crime novel. Good grief — been done a million times.”  — Chip MacGregor, MacGregor Literary

Okay…let’s talk about a few DONTS for your first chapter

Don’t: Open With A Prologue (Unless You Really Know What You’re Doing)

Yeah, yeah…I know. This opens a big can of gummie worms. But I am going on record here that 99 prologues out of a 100 are not needed. Prologues, especially if they are nothing but exposition, put a deathly brake on your story.  They force you to start your story twice and most of us can barely get it right once. When bad or even merely okay, a prologue makes the the reader think, “Get on with the story already!”

EXERCISE: Cut your prologue and see if your story opens faster. If you haven’t lost any clarity, you probably don’t need the prologue. Or just label it Chapter 1.

I’m not a fan of prologues, preferring to find myself in the midst of a moving plot on page one rather than being kept outside of it, or eased into it.” — Michelle Andelman, Regal Literary

“Prologues are usually a lazy way to give back-story chunks to the reader that can be handled with more finesse throughout the story. Damn the prologue, full speed ahead!”— Laurie McLean, Foreword Literary

Don’t: Lard In Too Much Backstory Or Exposition

The first chapter is not the place to tell us everything. Exposition kills drama. Backstory is boring. Incorporating backstory is HARD WORK, but you must weave it artfully into the story not give us an INFO-DUMP in chapter 1.

ACT FIRST, EXPLAIN LATER. In other words, something has to happen! Then you can reflect on it. (This is another homily from Brother Bell)

I’m turned off when a writer feels the need to fill in all the backstory before starting the story. A story that opens on the protagonist’s mental reflection of their situation is a red flag.”  — Stephany Evans, FinePrint Literary Management

“One of the biggest problems is the ‘info dump’ in the first few pages, where the author ties to tell us everything we supposedly need to know to understand the story. Getting to know characters in a story is like getting to know people in real life. You find out their personality and details of their life over time.”- Rachelle Gardner, Books & Such Literary Agency

Don’t: Confuse Readers or Use False Starts 

One of the biggest pitfalls in starting a story is to begin with an opening line that is confusing but might make perfect sense once the reader learns more later. But once confused, few readers will venture further.

This is not to say you can’t include info in your opening that acquires additional meaning once the reader learns more. That technique is often a highly rewarding tool. But the opening should make sense.

You describe something awful but then someone wakes up and reader finds out it was just a dream. DON’T DO IT! Or you kill off someone in first chapter and it is someone we never really hear or care about again. If you begin with an on-camera murder, you must then use the rest of the story to make this person come back to life in our memories and maybe even make us mourn this person.

“I don’t like it when the main character dies at the end of Chapter One. Why did I just spend all this time with this character? I feel cheated.” — Cricket Freeman, The August Agency

“I dislike opening scenes that you think are real, then the protagonist wakes up. It makes me feel cheated.” — Laurie McLean, Foreword Literary.

Miscellaneous Don’ts

  • Introduce too many characters too early (See illustration above)
  • Use excessive description The [adjective] sun rose in the [adjective] [adjective] sky, shedding its [adjective] light across the [adjective] [adjective] land.
  • Use bad weather symbolism (gathering storm clouds)
  • Rely on clichés (detective wakes with hangover)
  • Write: “Years later, Monica would look back and laugh…”
  • Give the spotlight to whiny or disgusting characters
  • Have character directly addressing the reader
  • Open with “Twenty minutes before she died…”
  • Write this: “Little did she know the killer was watching her…”
  • Open with a dream (Bobby in the Shower syndrome)

And that, crime dogs, is my sermon du jour. Don’t get discouraged. Do keep writing. Don’t let the bastards get you down. Do take good care of yourself and your loved ones.


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PJ Parrish is the New York Times and USAToday bestseller author of the Louis Kincaid thrillers. Her books have won the Shamus, Anthony, International Thriller Award and been nominated for the Edgar. Visit her at

34 thoughts on “The Dos and Don’ts
Of A Great First Chapter

    • Hey, good for you! Congratulations on no. 3. Man, you don’t even get a quick vacation?

  1. Prologues?

    True story.

    My character recounts the story of a reeking large, hairy creature walking between two fighting hole positions (once, they were universally called foxholes) in a training area at Camp Pendleton. It was dark, 0200 in the morning, and chilly. The two awake (NOT woke) Marines standing watch in the fighting holes (one guy asleep, the other guy, uhm, not) were terrified. The smelly creature stopped, turned his (its) head from side to side, clearly able to see in the dark, and inspected the two men in attitudes of adjustment. (They were emptying their bladders.) Then the creature continued to stomp on through the fighting hole line and move on toward Palomar Mountain.

    In the moment, in the twinkling of an eye, the editor was on to me in an e-mail. “Wait just a @$^#&%*! minute. How do we KNOW these creatures can see in the dark?” I knew he meant in a fictive sense.

    As Little Big Man said of Custer, “I had him.”

    “Remember that prologue you had (practically demanded) me throw out? It’s in there. There were two things I wanted the reader to know in that prologue, and wanted them hidden until the right time in the story.”

    “THIS,” I wrote, “is why I wrote the prologue in the first place. Now. Please tell me where else in the story could those two important pieces of information have been put?”

    We still don’t exchange Christmas cards.

    I stand by prologues. Not every novel needs one. But a prologue when done right raises the stakes in a story.

    By the way, the story of large, hairy creatures bullying their way in to Camp Pendleton AND 29 Palms Marine base, is recounted in several places on the internet. No one really knows whether or not the stories are true.

    • Every piece of advice here at TKZ comes, as you know, with a caveat. That rules are made to be broken. The no-prologue thing is not a rule; I’ve used them myself! It’s just a caution because usually they are really nothing but sad little appendages (I don’t know if there is a word for a thing that hangs forlornly at the FRONT of an animal) 🙂

      In your case, Jim, I would have read the prologue and definitely turned the page.

      • Agree, re: prologues.

        I’m reading Michael Connelly’s “The Wrong Side of Goodbye”, and it opens with prologue.

        Opening with prologue is a “rule” worth breaking when it’s key to the narrative / story arc. Many crime fiction authors have used it well over the decades.

  2. This is perfect advice coming on the 3rd day of NaNo. It’s my 16th book, but your advice is solid – it’s like a line of the road, you’re reminding where not to drive.

    • Ha! Good metaphor. But don’t forget to leave room for detours. Good luck with NaNo.

  3. Excellent reminders, Kris. I’m approaching 50K in the current novel, and yesterday the Writers in the Storm Blog was asking folks to share opening lines. I went back to look at mine, and … cringe. Needs work, or paragraph juggling, or something. I’ll revisit with this post in mind.

    • It took me years to learn to write that first couple hundred words and let it be. Then go back later and write the real beginning. Sometimes, the right opening doesn’t hit you until you’re well into the story.

  4. A bunch of great tips! And I LOVE that opening photo at the beginning of this post–that’s usually me. LOL! This hasn’t been a good year for creativity flow but I FINALLY got started working on a manuscript I’ve been kicking around with a friend. The opening chapter is horrible right now–I don’t think it starts on precisely the right timing & it doesn’t yet start the protag off with enough power. But I’m resisting the urge to endlessly tinker with it. I want to get the manuscript drafted first, then come back to it. I know from past experience with other manuscripts how long you can get bogged down tinkering with the opening over & over.

    Only one tip here I don’t agree with. As a reader (who reads mostly historical), I don’t like it when people DON’T identify time/place at the heading of the chapter. In my experience, writers fairly uniformly suck at letting readers know the time and place within the body of the story. And if they’re writing a good quality story, it should be no skin off anyone’s nose to do readers the simple courtesy of providing that information (unless perhaps there’s some mystery element that requires absence of the information). There is nothing more aggravating then reading the opening pages of a book & having no idea of when/where you are. And if authors pull that stunt for too long, I ditch the book. I have no tolerance for it.

    This post does remind us how many jobs an opening chapter has. Phew!

    • Hey BK. I don’t disagree with your comment about chapter tag lines. Sometimes, esp with historicals, they are necessary. It’s just that I have seen so many misused that, like prologues, I tend to be a bit…vociferous…in my objections. And yeah…try to move beyond your merely “okay” opening and get into the meat of your story. I will bet a better opening will reveal itself on rewrites.

  5. Solid, Kris. Should be bookmarked by every new writer (and thanks for the mentions).

    I heartily second the advice about getting to the dialogue early. I’ve looked at many a manuscript by new writers over the years, and have lost count of the number of times I counseled cutting everything in the first chapter until you get to the dialogue, or right before the dialogue. It works wonders.

  6. Great post! And a reason to revisit my first scene of my current WIP sequel. While things are a bit “happy” in the opening lines, they quickly fall apart (before the magical 400-word mark).

    And for JSB (*Q: may I call you “JSB”?*), I’ve got dialogue right up front.

  7. Great advice, Kris, and very timely! As I work on my third novel, I keep going back to Chapter One and making little changes. Maybe it’s time for me to finalize it and move on. I’m going to sit down with your list today and get it done. Thanks.

  8. The first chapter for newer writers is often for the writer to get things figured out in his head, not for the reader, and it can be removed with no loss to the book. In other words, don’t keep going back and getting the prose perfect or become too attached to it because it may go away and good riddance.

    I taught a course on writing first chapters, and one of the first lessons was how not to start that first scene. At the end of the course, I critiqued everyone’s first chapter. A good chunk of them started that first chapter exactly how I told them not to. Either they never paid attention, they wrote the chapter before the course and didn’t bother rewriting it, or they thought they were the one exception to not having a novel starting with the heroine watching a movie on her TV while whining about her life because this scene was PERFECT. Sigh. And people ask me why I no longer teach.

    • One of the biggest takeaways from a two week novel outlining workshop I took back in 2013 was that writers often start their novels *too early,* plot-wise, and usually need to start later.

      • Yeah, that was a huge revelation early in my career when I heard an experienced author say it in a workshop, Totally changed how I thought about plotting.

    • I like that way of thinking about, Marilynn, that the first chapter you write is meant for you to sort of find your footing before moving on. The hard part is not obsessing about getting it perfect the first time and having faith that you can go back and fix it — or even toss it!

  9. Thank you so much for this “re-visitation”, Kris. Into my file it goes for reference later. And thanks for the quotes from the other experts you included.

    I also like the picture up top. That bird on the right is my editor, Dori, and the one on the left is…well, you get the picture! 🙂

    My fave line from your post? Good writing does not call attention to itself. You know it when you see it, but boy howdy, it’s hard to pull off when you’re just gettin’ the hang of things.

  10. I am bookmarking this, Kris. Tons of great info, easy to digest, and all in one place. Thank you.

  11. Another stellar craft post, Kris! Comprehensive, solid advice, written in an easy-to-read and entertaining style, and backed up by quotes from agents. I also agree with your take on prologues. This is the most detailed, yet accessible blog post I’ve read on how to write a compelling first chapter. Kudos to you for helping writers learn how to hook readers in without misleading or confusing them. I hope you’ll consider compiling all your excellent TKZ craft posts into a fiction-writing guide.
    I’ve shared this on Facebook and to my BC Writers FB group, which has over 1000 members.

    • Many thanks Jodie. Good to see you pop in here! This post was taken from one of our workshop Powerpoints. (Hence all the pix!)

  12. NOTE TO SELF: Copy this to the ‘Solid Advice’ file and re-read often. One thought that wasn’t mentioned. Make last paragraph drag reader into Chapter 2. I hope TKZ and PJ do the same for the last chapter.

  13. Very helpful post, Kris! I’m currently on Chapter 2 of my fourteenth novel (which will be the eighth I publish, if all goes well), and this is a great checklist for both drafting and especially in revision.

    I’m happy to say I managed to introduce my sleuth heroine in the second sentence of the opening chapter, the eventual victim, and two potential suspects all within a page or so, but there’s so much more that goes into a successful opening chapter.

    Your post lays that out beautifully.

    • I started a book a long time ago (it was a stand alone that never saw the light of day) in which I didn’t have my protag come on stage until chapter 4. I still have the partial MS and go back and re-read it at times and laugh. (note to self: Maybe I should drag it out and show it to you guys under the headline: DON’T LET THIS HAPPEN TO YOU.

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