Jordan Dane @JordanDane Today we have the first 400 words of a novel entitled ORGANIZATION K. With it written in first person, I wanted to talk about using first person – benefits and dangers – as well as give our … Continue reading
By PJ Parrish Well, I’m not sure exactly where we are today with today’s submission, but I will say I liked reading this one. Which is why I’m going to be kinda tough on you, brave writer. Thanks for submitting … Continue reading
by James Scott Bell @jamesscottbell Going to be a long post today, so pack a lunch. And be prepared to add to the discussion. The issues are important and come to me by way of an email (quoted with permission): … Continue reading
By Elaine Viets Writers, I feel your pain! As you struggle with your first pages, I’ve had my own writing fight – six weeks crafting the first chapter of my new Angela Richman mystery. I had to introduce my death … Continue reading
Hop in, fellow travelers. Today we’re off on a short, shocking car ride with the protagonist of The List. I hope you’ll take a few moments to read my critique, then add your own comments. The List Everyone … Continue reading
JordanDane @JordanDane A brave anonymous author has submitted their first 400 word beginning to their novel for feedback. My thoughts will follow the author’s submission. Please add your constructive criticism in your comments. Enjoy! *** ESCALATION Chapter 1 Conversation … Continue reading
By Elaine Viets It was a pleasure to critique this first page. Our Brave Author had an intriguing premise and a fresh way of starting this story. As you can tell, I liked it. In fact, I really liked it. … Continue reading
By SUE COLETTA Another brave writer submitted their first page for critique. Enjoy. I’ll catch you on the flipside. WATCH ALL NIGHT It was the other buildings that looked sinister. They slumped against each other, lining the alley in ancient, … Continue reading
Jordan Dane @JordanDane An intrepid anonymous author has submitted their first 400 words of “The Nature of Things” for critique. My feedback follows. Please help this author and provide your constructive comments, TKZers. Enjoy. *** “Couldn’t have happened to a … Continue reading
by Debbie Burke @burke_writer Please welcome today’s Brave Anonymous Author with a submission entitled Samuel’s Mine. CHAPTER ONE Oddly enough her fingernails were left unbroken. Each nail remained intact, as sharp and fresh as they had been right before Julia … Continue reading