If You Want Pace & Tension – Stick with the Action – First Page Critique of ESCALATION

JordanDane @JordanDane   A brave anonymous author has submitted their first 400 word beginning to their novel for feedback. My thoughts will follow the author’s submission. Please add your constructive criticism in your comments. Enjoy! *** ESCALATION Chapter 1 Conversation … Continue reading

First Page Critique: Watch All Night

By SUE COLETTA Another brave writer submitted their first page for critique. Enjoy. I’ll catch you on the flipside. WATCH ALL NIGHT It was the other buildings that looked sinister. They slumped against each other, lining the alley in ancient, … Continue reading

Know Your Genre and Do the Research – First Page Critique: The Nature of Things

Jordan Dane @JordanDane An intrepid anonymous author has submitted their first 400 words of “The Nature of Things” for critique. My feedback follows. Please help this author and provide your constructive comments, TKZers. Enjoy. *** “Couldn’t have happened to a … Continue reading

Mystery Elements and Sass Are the New Black – First Page Critique-The Dangerous Dame

Jordan Dane @jordandane Don your fedora and breathe in the smoky air of a shadowy life when you read this anonymous submission of 400 words for THE DANGEROUS DAME. My feedback will be on the flip side. Please share your … Continue reading