by James Scott Bell @jamesscottbell Today we have another of our first-page critiques, this one with the title Darkness and Blood. Let’s have a look and discuss it on the other side. A few minutes past midnight in the south … Continue reading
Hop in, fellow travelers. Today we’re off on a short, shocking car ride with the protagonist of The List. I hope you’ll take a few moments to read my critique, then add your own comments. The List Everyone … Continue reading
JordanDane @JordanDane A brave anonymous author has submitted their first 400 word beginning to their novel for feedback. My thoughts will follow the author’s submission. Please add your constructive criticism in your comments. Enjoy! *** ESCALATION Chapter 1 Conversation … Continue reading
By Elaine Viets It was a pleasure to critique this first page. Our Brave Author had an intriguing premise and a fresh way of starting this story. As you can tell, I liked it. In fact, I really liked it. … Continue reading
By SUE COLETTA Another brave writer submitted their first page for critique. Enjoy. I’ll catch you on the flipside. WATCH ALL NIGHT It was the other buildings that looked sinister. They slumped against each other, lining the alley in ancient, … Continue reading
Jordan Dane @JordanDane An intrepid anonymous author has submitted their first 400 words of “The Nature of Things” for critique. My feedback follows. Please help this author and provide your constructive comments, TKZers. Enjoy. *** “Couldn’t have happened to a … Continue reading
by Debbie Burke @burke_writer Please welcome today’s Brave Anonymous Author with a submission entitled Samuel’s Mine. CHAPTER ONE Oddly enough her fingernails were left unbroken. Each nail remained intact, as sharp and fresh as they had been right before Julia … Continue reading
Jordan Dane @jordandane Don your fedora and breathe in the smoky air of a shadowy life when you read this anonymous submission of 400 words for THE DANGEROUS DAME. My feedback will be on the flip side. Please share your … Continue reading
By SUE COLETTA Calling all fantasy lovers! Please enjoy today’s offering from another brave writer. I’ll catch you on the flip-side with my comments. The Arthani Prince The Arthani palace was much smaller than the Razvian one, but what it … Continue reading
by Debbie Burke @burke_writer Please welcome today’s Brave Author who’s submitted a first page entitled: Zip&Milly: Siberian Adventure “Raccoon” — an inquisitive legal assistant from Ducklingburg, U.S.A., appeared in the car of a speeding Siberian commuter rail quite unexpectedly. Appeared being … Continue reading