Mystery Elements and Sass Are the New Black – First Page Critique-The Dangerous Dame

Jordan Dane @jordandane Don your fedora and breathe in the smoky air of a shadowy life when you read this anonymous submission of 400 words for THE DANGEROUS DAME. My feedback will be on the flip side. Please share your … Continue reading

First Page Critique – Zip & Millie: Siberian Adventure

by Debbie Burke @burke_writer Please welcome today’s Brave Author who’s submitted a first page entitled: Zip&Milly: Siberian Adventure “Raccoon” — an inquisitive legal assistant from Ducklingburg, U.S.A., appeared in the car of a speeding Siberian commuter rail quite unexpectedly. Appeared being … Continue reading

Heil Safari – First Page Critique

Today let’s welcome another Brave Anonymous Author who offers the first page of Heil Safari. Title:  Heil Safari Captain Martin Beyer wondered in alarm how he could save his friend’s life. His friend, Second Lieutenant Hans Fritz, was in danger … Continue reading